What do you think of this, please critique?

I can't really think of any ways to improve this, so for the record I'll just say that I loved it. I'm serious, this is a really great piece of writing. Is it part of a vampire novel? If so, good job, it's definitely kind of cliche' with the whole "girl running through woods being chased by vampire" thing, but IMO, who cares if a scene is cliche' as long as it's amazingly written? Something about it, though, reminds me of a kidnapping victim escaping and being caught again or something...or maybe a princess? (You said the beauty of her smile was renowned across two nations...) Either way, you really sucked me in with this. You dropped little bits of info here and there that made me want to find out more about the characters and what's going to happen to them (not to mention who they are), and the dialogue gave me insight into their personalities and sounded natural, not forced...I guess what I'm trying to say is, I hope this turns out to be part of a novel you're writing, because now I want to read the rest! :) Feel free to contact me if you need editting help or anything...and good luck with your writing!